“Available” Leaves the Nest

Posted: September 9, 2008 in Uncategorized
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Just sent my short story, “Available,” off to Necrotic Tissue for their anthology, “Malpractice: An Anthology of Bedside Terror.”

This was a fun story to write. As I mentioned before, I completed a first draft quickly, and have spent the past 2-3 weeks tweaking it. This is one of the few stories I didn’t give to someone for a critique before submission. That’s generally a no-no, but I was pretty sure of my direction on this one from the start.

We’ll soon see how good my sense of direction is.

As usual, there’s a fair amount of comic relief. A brief excerpt, where our protagonist arrives at the Bloom Memorial Hospital ER:

Now, despite Ma’s dire warnings, he had come. It looked and sounded like any weekend ER — a cross between an army field hospital and a third-world vegetable market.

He gave his name to a muscular dude with a clipboard and a pistol bulge under his green scrubs. After a brief wait, he was called to a thick plate-glass window, where he relinquished his insurance card to the bony claws of an old woman with wispy jet black hair. She evaluated him through her squinty eyes as if he were a particularly unpleasant bowel movement, unsure if she should flush or call the doctor.

“Pawlicki?” She coughed up his name like a hairball. “Pawlicki. Didn’t you used to work here?”

“No ma’am. Never did.” He didn’t think dropping Mom’s name would get him preferential treatment.

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Comments
  1. Deb S says:

    Can’t wait to read the whole thing…YLP

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